Friday, November 2, 2012

Nanowrimo - Day #1

Hey all, it's been a couple of months again, but I'm not done yet. I'm participating in NaNoWriMo (National Novel Writing Month) and I've decided to take this story and continue it for the month. The idea is to write 50,000 words in one month (yikes). I will be posting here as I complete sections of the story, and I still welcome suggestions, but I will (hopefully) be posting much more frequently than I expect people to keep up with. So feel free to toss me suggestions, or sit back and enjoy the story. If there is something you like, and want me to explore, mention it. If there is something you're not a fan of, you can let me know about that too! Thanks in advance for your support as I take on this daunting task.



Thomas quietly got up and headed out to explore the rest of the complex. It wasn't very big, and most of the rooms looked like the sleeping quarters he just left, so he decided not to disturb anyone. He found himself back in the armory from the night before, the few remaining candles having been burned very low. Soon the room would be dark, but for the small round window letting in just a bit of light from the pre-dawn sun. Thomas had never been one for religion, even before his daughter was taken, but there was something about this room, in this place. Perhaps it was the dream, perhaps the way the flickering light played around the room, or maybe because of the events of the previous night, but he felt an energy about the room, almost a presence. It felt like anticipation, a small speck of hope in a dark night. Something for him to hold on to. Thomas sat staring into the flames, back to a rack of weapons, until the last of the candles burned out.

Thomas didn't have to wait long after that for the others to wake up. Turns out that when you're a defender of the innocent and a crusader against the darkness, you get up when the sun does.

Benjamin walked into the room, breaking Thomas out of his reverie, “There you are. Couldn’t sleep, huh?”

Thomas took a moment before looking up from the now extinguished candles, “I dreamt of her again last night. About the night she…” Thomas’s voice trailed off as he tried to hide that he was getting choked up.

Benjamin placed a hand on Thomas’s shoulder, “Truly, I’m sorry for what happened to you. I can’t imagine what it would feel like to lose a child, especially with no explanation why.” He sat on the bench next to Thomas, “I can’t fix what happened, but I can offer you a chance to make sure that another father won’t have to go through what you have. To stop what happened in the coffee shop from happening to another poor girl.”

Thomas finally looked Benjamin in the eye, “Do I really have a choice? I’m already a target, and I can’t expect you to watch over me for the rest of my life. Besides, I would have done anything, given anything, to save Emily. How could I live with myself if I knew I could stop this from happening to someone else’s daughter, and chose not to?”

Benjamin smiled brightly, the effect seeming to take years off of his face, “I hoped that would be your answer. I think you’ll fit in well here. Everyone here has their own reasons for staying. Some might share, others… well, I wouldn’t recommend just asking.”

“So, what’s your story Ben?” Thomas asked with a small smirk. “You know all about me, so I think it’s only fair.”

“Ben huh? I suppose I can live with that. The Lord knows I’ve been called worse things. My story started a long time ago. I was a priest in a small Catholic parish outside Belfast in Northern Ireland. I was devout in my faith, but perhaps not quite so devout to the rules.” Ben stood up, and grabbed a few candles from an open box. He set to lighting them on the altar before he continued. “I spent my days tending to my small congregation, and I spent my nights in a manner unbecoming a man of the cloth. I was a charlatan, or so I thought anyway.

“Rural Ireland was a superstitious place, especially in the 70s. Whenever anyone got sick, or depressed, or started acting strangely, the religious types immediately jumped to possession. Myself, I was always for a more figurative translation of much of the Bible, rather than a literal, but that wasn’t the case for a lot of my parish members.” Ben’s voice takes on a rather bitter tone, “So I took advantage of them.”

“Well, I’m not congratulating you, but if it made them feel better, and you made a little off of it, where’s the harm?”

Ben sighed, “That’s what I thought too, but I was wrong. Very wrong.” Shaking his head, “This went on for some time, I’d pull out my Bible, say a few words, work them into a frenzy, and tell them that the spirit is gone, and after a couple of weeks, the victim should return to a more normal state, as long as there wasn’t too much psychological damage. I never expected that I would find someone that was actually possessed.”
Seeing Thomas’s eyes widen, Ben allows himself a small, wistful smile, “You’re still surprised, even with what you now know and have seen? I miss that, that… innocence. Where was I… ah yes, the girl. Her name was, Roisin I think. She was probably 8 years old, about the same age as your Emily.” Ben spared a glance for Thomas, silently apologizing. “It seemed like the usual, she was acting strangely, and her parents would hear strange sounds during the night, coming from her room. I took the job, thinking it was like any other. I was so wrong.”

Ben closed his eyes, watching the scene replay in his mind…

It was a dark night, overcast, and it was raining. It was the sort of cold cloying rain that seeps in to your very bones. Ben approached the house and he could feel a chill in the air. Something more than just the cold rain trickled down his spine. As he reached up to knock on the door, a feeling of dread settled in his stomach.

He had barely raised my hand to knock when a smallish woman, probably in her 40s opened the door. “Ms. O’Sullivan, good evening, may I?” He gestured inside.

“Of course reverend, please. My daughter is upstairs, she’s locked herself in her room, and won’t come out.” Ben quickly hung his hat and coat on the brass hooks near the door and followed Ms. O’Sullivan into the house. They quickly made their way upstairs, where they found Mr. O’Sullivan softly calling to his daughter through the door.

“Honey, Rev. McKree is here, he wants to help you.” He called through the door. “No!” came the reply through the door. However, it didn’t sound quite right; it was almost a scream of fear, rather than a scream of defiance. Her voice seemed to get choked off at the end.

Ben looked at the frightened husband and wife, “Has anything like this ever happened before? Does she have any history of acting out or rebelling against you like this?”

Ms. O’Sullivan, obviously distraught, replied, “Nothing like this, nothing more than any other willful child. She’s a good kid, but recently she’s been acting strangely; throwing tantrums, screaming for no reason. That wasn’t why we called you though; she began muttering to herself in Gaelic. She doesn’t know Gaelic.”

Ben thought to himself that she must’ve just picked it up at school, or from TV, but he placed a hand on her arm, “Don’t worry Mr. and Mrs. O’Sullivan, I’ve seen this kind of thing before. Nothing to worry about, she’ll be fine.” Ben stood up and put an ear to the door. “Roisin, sweetie? Will you let me in? I just want to talk to you. Your parents are worried about you, because they love you.”

Ben listened at the door, but he heard no answer. He heard nothing at all, no movement, no rustling, and not even any breathing. He raised his hand to knock again and as his knuckles rapped on the door, it swung silently inward. He whispered to the parents, “See? She wants to talk. I’ll go in first, I’ve dealt with this kind of thing before.

He pushed the door open the rest of the way, and made his way into the dark room. There was a window on the South wall, but the curtains were drawn, billowing slightly. The window must’ve been open, explaining the chill in the room. The only light was spilling in from the hallway. Ben could make out a dresser against one wall, a bed against the other, with a small night stand next to it. He could make out the silhouette of a young girl sitting on the edge of the bed.

Ben stepped in to the room, reaching to flip the lights on. “I’m going to turn the lights on, okay? Then we can talk.” There was no response from Roisin, so he went ahead and flipped the switch. There was a brief flash as the ceiling light kicked on, then blew out. As the light flashed, there was a loud slam. Ben whirled to find the door shut behind him. He could hear the muffled cries of the O’Sullivan’s outside the door as he tried to pull the door open. It was no use, the door was stuck tight.

At this point, Ben was nervous. Very nervous. He had never experienced anything like this before, and he thought he had seen it all. “Roisin? What’s wrong honey? Your parents are worried about you, they say this isn’t like you.” At the sound of his voice, the shadow that was Roisin cocked her head to the side, a quizzical motion. As Ben’s eyes adjusted to the gloom, he could make out more of the room. On the floor at the foot of the bed, there was a circle, made of various items. A jump rope, some stuffed animals, a rumpled t-shirt. They were arranged in such a way that the inner edge was a perfect circle.

“Did you make this?” Ben gestured to the circle, “It’s impressive, it must have taken a while to organize everything so perfectly.” He began to edge closer to Roisin. As he moved, he allowed some of the glow from the lights under the door to shine on Roisin. He wished he hadn’t. Her arms and face were covered with small, red scratches, like she had been digging at her skin. Her mouth was held in an amused grin, and her eyes… her eyes were empty. Ben couldn’t see anything in them.

Ben had been doing this long enough; he remembered that he was carrying his Bible. He had gone through the motions of an exorcism enough times that he could recite the lines, even if he was literally shaking in his boots. He began the litany that he had spoken so many times when he heard laughter coming from the direction of the girl. It couldn’t have been the girl, because it was a guttural, deep and terrifying sound. Ben was vaguely aware that the parents were shouting from outside the door. He was vaguely aware that he had stopped chanting. Mostly, he was aware of the laughter. He could see her shoulders shaking as if she were laughing, but the sound seemed to come from all around him, consuming him.

As the laughter died down, a voice came from Roisin, harsh and guttural, just like the laughter, “Please, don’t stop on my account Prrriest.” The voice was heavily accented, but Ben could not identify it. It seemed to spit the word “priest” as if it were distasteful. “It has been a while since anyone has… interrrrupted me. I can smell your fear, it is intoxicating.” Roisin’s body jerked itself upright, and walked over to the circle. She moved as if she were a marionette, and someone were jerking on the strings. Ben could do nothing, paralyzed with his fear.

“Watch, prrriest, and know you can do nothing. There is nothing left of the girl you knew as Roisin. I have consumed her, mind and soul. I care nothing for the body.” The girl was now standing in the center of the circle, the same expression on her face, as her dead eyes looked at Ben. “You, prrriest, I will let live. Your fear is heady, and I wish to dine on it again, when I am not so… satisfied. We will meet again.”

The booming, grating, horrible laughter began again, and suddenly everything happened at once. There was a sound as if all the air had been sucked out of the room. Roisin collapsed to the floor in a heap, as if the strings holding her up had been severed. Her parents burst into the room, the door no longer held shut, letting light spill into the room. In the center of it all stood Ben, silent and unmoving, too numb to react to what just happened, too scared to process it.

Mrs. O’Sullivan’s wail pierced the haze and everything came crashing in…

“Wow,” said Thomas, “I’m sorry, that sounds terrifying. Did you ever find the thing?”

Ben looked at Thomas, his age finally showing in his weary eyes. In a small voice, he replied, “Yes.” Ben stretched, and shook his head, “I think that’s enough for now, why don’t you come with me, you can meet Father Adrian, and Karen.”


Sunday, August 12, 2012

In Dreams...



Once again I apologize for the delay in getting the 3rd scene up and going. I suppose I said that I wasn't going to adhere to any sort of schedule, but this is a little ridiculous. Here it is. I used a couple suggestions for this episode, shown at the bottom. 




Thomas slumped down on the bench that could just as easily been in a locker room as this armory. Exhaustion rolled over him as the events of the previous night reminded him of the events those many years ago. 

"Come with me," asked Benjamin, with a gentle tone in his voice. "You're exhausted, and as long as you're here, we can keep you safe. We have a room where you can get cleaned up and rest. You don't have to decide anything tonight."

Benjamin led Thomas back down the way they had come to another side room. This one had 4 single beds and a bathroom attached. There was a t-shirt and jeans laid out on one of the beds. "These were the best we could come up with on short notice, they should fit you. Feel free to shower and rest, we'll talk in the morning." With that, Benjamin left Thomas alone with his thoughts. 

Thomas sat on the edge of one of the mattresses, simply staring into his hands for a long time. He gradually became aware of a sickly sweet smell of garbage in the room, and realized it was coming from his clothes. Deciding that moving was better than thinking, he turned on the shower, kicked of his shoes and stepped in, fully-clothed. Why? Why is this happening again? Didn't I pay my price when I lost Emily?

After the water rinsed some of the stench out of his clothes, he stripped them off and let the hot water run over him. Who are these people really? How did they know who I am, and what happened to Emily. Can I trust them?

Thomas's mind continued to race as he went through the motions of washing and climbing into bed, exhausted. How can I expect to sleep after everything that's happ....

Thomas awoke with a start. He looked around, but couldn't figure out what had caused him to wake up. Well, I'm up now, Thomas thought to himself, might as well get a glass of water and try to calm down. Thomas climb out of bed, and slid his feet into his fuzzy slippers. He knew that the little kitty slippers looked ridiculous, but they were a gift from Emily. He shuffled down the hall to the bathroom to get a glass of water, half awake. He stepped into the bathroom and reach towards the light switch. He gave it a flick, and the light bulb over the sink, exploded with a flash. 

"Jesus!" Thomas shouted as he almost jumped backward into the bathtub. I'll fix it in the morning, he grumbled to himself, fumbling around in the deep gloom for the glass he kept on the counter. He filled and brought it to his lips, the cool water soothing his nerves. Get a grip man, he thought to himself. You're getting to be as bad as Emily, jumping at your own shadow. As he was putting down his glass, he felt a cold chill pass over him. He looked up, and could have sworn he saw a shadow behind him in the mirror, but when he turned to look - terrified - there was nothing there. Guess, I'm sleeping with the lights on tonight, he sighed. 

Headed back down the hallway to his room, Thomas decided to pop his head into Emily's room. He wasn't quite sure why, he just wanted to make sure she was okay. As he approached the door - slightly ajar like usual - that chill began to turn into a cold feeling of dread, inching its way along his spine. He slowly opened the door and walked into the room. It took everything he had not to turn and run. If it wasn't his daughter's room, he probably would have. It was the dead of night, and it was cloudy to boot, so there wasn't enough light to see anything. Still, something was wrong. He could feel it, down to his bones. 

He slowly made his way over to the small My Little Pony lamp that Emily had on her dresser, and reached to turn it on. He hesitated. He told himself that it was just because he didn't want to wake her up, but deep down, he knew it was because he didn't want to see. Gritting his teeth, he turned the knob, bathing the room in a soft pinkish orange glow. Nothing happened, nothing jumped out to grab him. There was nothing there. There was NOTHING there! Where was Emily? He rushed over to the bed, but it was obvious there was no one in it. "Emily!?" he shouted. He rushed out of the room, yelling through the house, turning on all the lights as he went. She was nowhere to be found. He even ran into the backyard, searching frantically. He froze as he looked off into the woods behind his property. There looked like a pair of eyes, large and ghostly white, staring back at him. He could feel his heart begin to slow and his skin get cold and clammy as he was held by that gaze. They blinked, and just like that, they were gone. 

Thomas's eyes popped open. He lay in bed in the Sanctuary, covered in a cold sweat, and breathing hard. He lay there for a while, getting his breathing under control. He eventually rubbed his face with both hands, and reached for his watch. It was only 5:30 in the morning, he had been asleep for maybe 4 hours. He slowly swung his feet over the side of the bed, knowing that he wasn't going to get back to sleep. He never did when this dream came back. It was always the same. Even though he had never really let himself believe what had happened, he knew. Benjamin and the events of the previous night just confirmed it. There were… things out there. Things that people didn't want to believe existed. Now, they wanted him to learn to fight them. How could he not? He had never given up hope, these 8 years, that Emily was still out there. It was foolish, he knew, but he couldn't let her go. Now, he might have the chance to at least find out what happened...



- Here is the first big reveal, Emily turns out to be his daughter, who vanished. Turns out the monsters under her bed were real.

For next time:

- We will be introduced to Ben's team, so who are they? What is their goal, how did they know about Thomas?

- Ben had mentioned that a "shaper" was responsible for what happened to Emily. What does that mean, what is a shaper? What can they do?

Looking forward to hearing what everyone comes up with, and I will endeavor to make the next post within as many weeks as this one took me months!

Thursday, April 12, 2012

Sanctuary


Sorry about the delay everyone (all like 10 of you), I've been very busy with the new job and new life out here in California. That aside, here is post number two for your reading pleasure. I've taken a couple of suggestions this time, and logged some of them away for later. I'm putting the list at the bottom, so they don't act as spoilers.



"Unnngh..." Thomas was beginning to come to.

"That's the usual reaction people have to Exposure." The old man was leaning against a brick wall, in what was probably an alley, but it looked, and smelled, more like a garbage dump. "It's not every day someone has a Puppeteer come after them after all."

Thomas rolled over and his hand landed in something damp and slimy. Then it moved. Thomas fully came to with a start, looking around, and wondering where the coffee shop had gone. With a groan and a hand on his head, Thomas slowly climbed to his feet. "Where are we?"

Benjamin looked around, "We're in the alley a couple of block's down from Joe's. I would've carried you further, but you're not light, and I used up a lot of my energy in that fight. So far I haven't heard anything out of the police this far away, but we should probably get moving. Can you walk?"

"I-I think so..." Thomas shook his head, trying to clear out some of the fuzz. "Where to?" 

Benjamin jerked his head towards the entrance to the Alley, "Come on, I know a place where you can clean up and we can get a drink. I suppose I have some explaining to do."

After walking for quite a few blocks... well, more like a mile or two, Thomas and Benjamin ended up in a another alley, facing a worn, green metal door. Thomas wasn't quite sure to expect when he walked through the door, but a Catholic chapel wasn't it. 

"This way," the old man said without looking back. "We're almost there." Benjamin led Thomas down a couple of hallways and through a small sanctuary. Thomas couldn't help but note that the inside of the church was much nicer than the outside. "Through here." Benjamin placed his hand on a section of the wall, and pressed in. The wall slid back and inch, and began sliding open. Thomas would never have seen it, even if he was looking.

They entered a room that could only be described as a cross between a chapel and an armory. On one wall hung an ornate cross, made of a polished dark wood, that appeared to have stains on it, as if someone had actually been hung on it. And it looked old… maybe someone had. There was an altar at the foot of the cross with hundred of candles on it, most of them already burned low. On the other two walls of the rectangular room hung racks of weapons and armor, holy water and censers. Thomas stood in the entry, taking it all in. Three hours ago (or more, he wasn't sure how long he was out) he was a mild mannered barista, not living up to his potential. Now he had been the target of a Puppeteer, and been saved by the Battle Pope. 

He was broken out of his reverie when Benjamin gestured to a bench next to a rack of crossbow bolts. "Have a seat. I'm sure you have questions, and I will do my best to answer them, but be quick, for we have a lot of work to do."

Even with everything that had happened, Thomas had to ask the question that had been bothering him since he met the old man, "How did you know my name?" Benjamin smiled at him and gestured to his name tag. Thomas's ears turned a little red at that, and he looked at the plastic tag. "Wait… this only has my first name on it. You spoke my full name. What gives man? You said you'd answer my questions." 

Benjamin smiled again, "You got me, I just couldn't resist. Thomas, you've been on our list for a while now. Ever since you crossed paths with that Shaper some years ago. We had hoped you would be left alone, that it was an isolated incident, but when it rains it pours. We're not sure why, but that Puppeteer was after you. We'll come back to you in a minute though, anything else?"

"Uh… okay," Thomas nervously scratched at his hair. "Who are you? What is this place?" 

"That's a big question, but I'll give you the cliff notes version. This is what is known officially as a Sanctuary, a place for members of the church, and members of other faiths with the same goals, who are actively defending humanity from the tides of darkness. You more than anyone know what is out there, and I'm truly sorry for what happened to you, but know that you are not alone, there are those of us who fight to protect the people who can't protect themselves. Until about 30 years ago, our order, and those like ours were able to keep people like you from finding out about the underside of the coin, the darkness to our light." Benjamin paused for a moment, taking care to light several new candles, crossing himself as he did so.

"Honestly, it's because of the Internet that people have found out that humans are not the dominant species on the planet. There are far too many of us, and we are far to connected for such things to remain hidden. Our only defense is that we are many, and the creatures of the night are few." He shook his head, "But that's not what you asked, is it? I'm sure you've learned that much, looking into what that creature you saw was. Who we are is the militant arm of the Catholic church. Or at least, we were. The church and I had something of a disagreement, and I decided to become self-employed. Several of my fellow warrior-priest came with me, but we are in dire need of help."

"And I'm supposed to be that help? I was barely able to spray water at that creature in the coffee-shop, and I don't even remember doing it." Thomas folded his arms over his chest, in what could almost be described as a pout. 

"Do you know what that creature was, Thomas?"

"You said it was called a Puppeteer, right? I can certainly see where it got it's name." Thomas said with a snort. 

"You're correct, but not completely. The demon took over the girl in the coffee shop's body, to be sure, but it can only do that with someone with a hole in their soul, it needs something to latch on to. That girl might have looked normal and happy, but there was a part of her that was missing. Perhaps she made a deal, some demons are very fond of that, or perhaps it was trauma. Either way, it was lucky for us. When the creature took a body, I could hurt it. It was simply arrogant in that it would be able to hurt me more. It assumed it could kill me. And without your distraction, it probably could have. Which brings me to the point." He paused for what was obviously, to everyone in the room, dramatic effect. "You acted. You saw everyone else in the coffee shop. They were transfixed. They could no more flee than fight. They couldn't have moved a muscle. That is the real power that a Puppeteer wields. Fear.

"I was crazy scared, I don't know what you're talking about. I barely remember spraying the creature. I just remember the girl going crazy, and then you stabbing her in the heart. Everything else is kind of a blur."

"There are generally two type of reactions to Exposure. The most common, which will most likely occur with everyone at the coffee shop, is denial. Even though people now know these creatures exist, they don't want to believe it when they see it. They will rationalize it away, thinking things like, 'there was a crazy man with a sword that killed that poor girl', when they should think, 'that man just saved our lives.' The other reaction is a sort of mental break. They realize what happened, but they can't process it. Something like that might have happened to that poor girl, leaving a foothold for the Puppeteer. It can happen in wildly varying degrees and might not manifest for years. Or it might cause someone to go on a killing spree. It's impossible to tell." Benjamin had been pacing, as if teaching a class, but he stopped abruptly and looked Thomas in the eye. "There is a third type of reaction, one much more rare. What you did was embrace the fear. You might not realize it, but you were able to experience the horror, process it, and fight back. Your water spout was a baby-step on the road to fighting against these creatures. We need you, and like it or not, there is really no going back. I wounded that creature, but it wanted you. It will be back."

Thomas rocked on his heels at that realization, as if he had been punched in the gut. It was real, all if it was real. Everything that happened to Emily… "Nice recruitment speech, Ben. 'Join us or die', is that it?" 

Ben sadly shook his head, "We will not abandon you to them, whatever your decision, we will do what we can to protect you. However, we are not perfect, and the best defense is to teach you to defend yourself. To join us."



Here are the suggestions that I've used, although some of the other ideas I extrapolated from your suggestions and from conversations about the story.

- Benjamin is a ex-Catholic priest. 
- The creature can influence a crowd of people
- the name-tag
- Ben explains things :)



For next time (and perhaps a few scenes in the future) we have some doozy's to answer. 

- what exactly are these "Demons" or "creatures of darkness"
- what is their origin? are they cthuluean (sp?), are legends and folk lore based on them?
- why is Ben no longer with the church
- who else is on Ben's team
- and the big one, who is Emily, what is a Shaper, and how are they connected? 
- oh, and of course, what happens next?

Feel free to offer any suggestions not on this list, or the ones on this list, or anything else. If you notice typos, let me know, it's getting late, and I should be asleep, but I was on a roll. I look forward to hearing from everyone!

Friday, March 23, 2012

Joe's Joe


Okay everyone, I've used a few suggestions that you all provided. I'm not sure how I'm going to format everything, but I thought it would be interesting to list the suggestions I've used. If this doesn't seem like a good way to do it, let me know, and I'll change it going forward. I had no plan when I began writing this, beyond the name of the main character, and I found it interesting that I sort of gravitated towards a horror-comedy combination. Who knows how it will turn out. Certainly not me, and that's awesome. So here are the suggestions I used, with the intention of using some of the others later.:

- The main character is a barista
- He meets an old Irishman named Benjamin McKree 



"Dammit!" Thomas shouted, burning himself on the espresso machine for the third time in a week. He frowned and shook his head, moving to the sink. "I'm so sick of this place!" He railed to no one in particular. 

"Um… I-I don't suppose I could get that coffee…?" piped a mousey young woman from the counter. Thomas turned on his heel, ready to tell her exactly what she could do with her coffee, when the front door flew open with a crash. Which was saying something, because the door was equipped with one of those hydraulic arm things to prevent the door from doing exactly that. The coffee shop wasn't exactly busy, but what little conversation there had been was gone, chased out the open door. 

Judging from the noise, Thomas had been expecting a buffalo to come charging into the shop, or at the very least a large, angry man. When a rather small, but fit older man came into the shop Thomas couldn't hide his surprise. He couldn't have been more than 5'5", skin still taut, if rather wrinkled over his face, with thinning white hair. 

Picking his jaw up, and shaking his head, he looked at the man, "Was that really necessary?" The old man's rheumy eyes found the source of the voice, and seemed to stare right through Thomas. 

"THOMAS ROSARIO! Tell me, did you see the direction the creature took when he entered your place of business!?" The booming voice could not possibly have belonged to this small old man. This time, Thomas's jaw would have hit the floor, had it not still been attached to his skull. 

"Buh…?" was all Thomas could manage to say. Perhaps not the most eloquent way to put it, but very to the point. 

"Oh, never mind!" The old man dropped into what Thomas thought was a fighting stance (his knowledge of fighting styles gained from kung-fu movies, he really had no way to be sure), and began to prowl through the coffee shop. No one moved. What is happening, Thomas thought to himself. Have I finally lost it? Before he could begin to repair the cracks in his sanity, it shattered all together. 

Had Mousey-girl grown? She was easily standing several inches taller than when she was asking about her coffee. Thomas leaned out over the counter to get a better look. She seems to be floating. I could have sworn she was earthbound when she entered the shop. His inner monologue continued, even as his body was ducking for cover behind the very espresso machine that had viscously burned him, before the world went insane. My inner monologue is rather calm, considering the circumstances. I should be freaking out, but I'm not. Well, that wasn't entirely true. Thomas's body, now having fallen, was trying to scoot under the counter that held the racks of cups and lids, continuing long after he had hit the wall.

As Thomas had his little nervous breakdown, the small, strangely spry old man had begun circling the floating young woman. Her head was tilted at a strange angle, and her arms and legs seemed to move independently of one another. Almost as if she were being jerked around by human-sized puppet strings. In fact, now that Thomas realized that, she wasn't so much floating as hanging in mid-air. For some reason, this seemed much more creepy, but he couldn't put his finger on why. 

"BEGONE DEMON!" Shouted the old man, in his much-too-loud-for-an-old-man voice. "You do not belong in this world!" 

The sound that came out of Mousey-girl's mouth could hardly be called human, but it certainly spoke English, "You are a fool if you think you can stand up to the likes of me, Benjamin McKr--!" The Mousey-girl marionette spun around as a column of freezing water hit her in the back. Well, her head spun around anyway. There was a sickening crack, but otherwise she didn't seem to notice. Thomas stood there with the faucet held tightly in both hands. "You!" The Mousey-girl turned demon pointed, and if you've ever seen someone point backwards… well, you probably haven't but it was weird. Given the situation, that's saying something. "How dare you! You are an insect! Less than an insect, you don't deserve to eat the dirt that my master has trod upon! You--!" Then her heart exploded. 

Thomas noticed several things. One, where the girl's left breast used to be, well, it was still there, but now there was several inches of metal sticking out of it as well. It looked like a sword, but it was too covered in gore to be sure. Two, hearts blood is very red. Three, said red blood was rapidly approaching Thomas in what could almost be described as a wave. Four, Thomas realized that he had forgotten his burnt hand was in pain, and it let out a fresh twinge to remind him. Lastly, Thomas realized that he shouldn't be thinking nearly this quickly, and everything happened all at once. 

The blood washed over Thomas in a crimson wave of sickly-sweet copper, the Mousey-girl fell to the ground, and perhaps most terrifyingly, he saw something briefly take shape in the air where the girl stood. He saw it just long enough for it to dissipate with a deafening roar, rushing out the front of the store in a whirlwind. Of course it blew out all the windows. It wouldn't be a monster if it left politely through the door. There was one final crash, as the Joe's Joe sign over the door fell to the ground in a heap. For a brief second, there was silence, and then reality seemed to snap back into place. Patrons began screaming, and rushing for the door. You wouldn't think that 8 people could cause a stampede, but you weren't there that night. It was short but fierce

Once a stunned Thomas and the old man were the only two left in the store, Benjamin pulled the sword from the girl's back and wiped it on her blouse. He extended his hand to the once again prone Thomas, "I think we should talk." This time, the old man sounded nothing more than an old Irishman. Thomas tried to reach for the man's hand, but reality had caught up with him as well, and all went dark.



At the end of each post, I will provide suggestions for suggestions if you will. Again, let me know if this seems redundant or unnecessary. 

- What was that creature?
- Who is the old man?
- How did he know Thomas's name?
- And of course... what happens next?


CHANGELOG: I realize that I said I wouldn't change things, however, I've decided that I can change typos, continuity gaffs, and other small things like that. For example, Rase pointed out that Thomas must have stood at one point, so I changed a couple of words to imply that he was knocked down again.

Wednesday, March 21, 2012

First!

So, I've always been terrible with introductions, and this time is no different. I suppose, in case there is anyone that reads this that doesn't already know me, I'll start with a little about myself. My name is Zach (hi everybody!), I'm 27, and I've recently - this week - moved to California for a new job in Internet Security. I'd tell you more about it, but then I'd have to kill you (ha ha, but seriously, hush hush stuff). I'm in school for network security, and I'm a huge fantasy and science-fiction fan. I love to travel, and I wish I could do it all the time. Hmm... yeah, that's good enough, lets get into what exactly it is you're reading.

For those that DO know me, you know that I'm always saying that I want to write a story or a book, or do something a little more creative. I'll start doing it for a week or two, but then I decide that I don't like something I've written, or I lose interest (which I can't promise won't happen here, but I'm hoping the interactive nature, which I will explain in a moment, will help urge me forward). I'm never satisfied with the finished product of what I write, and so it never sees the light of day. I hope to change that with this blog.

Enter Adventure Time Inc. I know the Inc. is a little played out, but Adventure Time was already taken. With this vessel, I am going to try to kill two birds with one stone, and hopefully provide some entertainment in the process. The two birds are called Not-Good-Enough and Boredom. They were very nasty birds, so don't feel bad with their passing. (Also, for those that are worried, this isn't a comedy blog, so much as a blog that will occasionally have humor in it, so my second-rate humor shouldn't scare you off).

Do I hear, "shut up and get to it already?" Yes? Very well, my intention with Adventure Time Inc. is to write an interactive story. Don't worry, there won't be any homework, all I'm asking of you (heretofore referred to as The Audience) is suggestions, comments and ideas. I intend to combine those ideas (those that I like anyway, I reserve the right to ignore any that I can't fit in or are just outrageous, or to edit them to fit the story) into a story that I will publish on here on a not-at-all regular basis. What that will look like is, I will write a post, not unlike a chapter, and The Audience will then comment on things they liked, didn't like, wanted to add or change, things that should be removed, and anything else The Audience can come up with. I will then incorporate said suggestions into the next "chapter". I suppose I should also point out that I intend this to be a fantasy or sci-fi story, but that can mean many different things!

I intend this to be a fun exchange of ideas with The Audience, but mostly it is an exercise in writing that I hope will also be entertaining. The most important part of this exercise will be for me to hit the publish button. I want this to be fluid and raw, instead of polishing it until there is nothing left. That is why I chose to use a blog, so that once it's out there, I hope people will call me out if I try and sneak in and change anything (other than typos, those I will fix). If I write myself into a corner, I will just have to write myself back out.

This has gotten much longer than I had thought it would, but that's a good thing. It means the words are starting to flow. I have some ideas on where to start this thing, but I wanted to get the ball rolling with The Audience. Please, if anyone has any suggestions for a character, a plot hook, an event, or any other ideas, post them in the comments, and I will take what I can from them! I've set up a twitter account and will be broadcasting this on FaceBook, so I hope to at least get a few nibbles. I also promise that I will work on the layout of the site, but probably not until I get into my new place and have my desktop set-up. Let's hear those suggestions The Audience (couldn't help getting one more in there.)!

EDIT: This doesn't count as an edit! I'm simply adding this disclaimer (even though I feel it is implied and redundant) that, while I don't intend to ever use this blog to make money (except perhaps from ads), by offering suggestions, The Audience is agreeing that I can use said suggestions, in whole or in part, to shape the narrative of this story. Thank you.